Wednesday, September 18, 2013

Reader Response (Draft 1 - Incomplete)

In the article ‘The Double Edge of Globalization’, Chanda (2007) expresses that globalization brings about both negative and positive effects. Globalization results in global economic growth and advancements in technology and telecommunications, creating a closely interlinked world. However, the current environmental degradation problem is also largely attributed to globalization.

He suggests that unsuccessful efforts in mitigating harmful globalization effects is chiefly due to the world’s top emitter of greenhouse gases, the United States’ refusal to participate in international environmental agreements.

However, I contradict his view, as in my opinion, lax environmental regulations in economically challenged countries are equally responsible. These countries generally do not impose strict environmental regulations, likely due to economic profits they receive from foreign investment and production to promote their own interests of developing the country. For instance, a high percentage of Indonesia’s deforestation is illegal and companies often use environmentally devastating methods such as forest fires to accelerate the clearing of land for sale and agriculture.

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1 comment:

  1. Hello!
    Sorry I got this up so late, couldn't post it in class and just got home! /:
    Anyway, I really enjoyed reading your response as it provided a new insight on causes of environmental degradation.
    Here are some improvements you can make:
    1. Content
    Chanda mentioned in his article that inconsistent governmental regulation results in environmental destruction, so maybe you can agree with this point.
    Also, he didn't suggest that the world's top emitter for greenhouse gases refusal to sign the Kyoto Protocol greatly hindered environmental protection policy. Rather, he used it as an example, so maybe you can rephrase that statement.
    2. Organization
    You can combined the first two paragraphs together as they are a summary of the article.
    Also, remember to include a conclusion in your completed response.
    3. Language
    Your sentences tend to be very long, so you can break them down into shorter sentences. This will make your response easier to understand.
    For eg, you can write "However, I contradict his view. In my opinion..."
    Forest fire is a resultant of the slash-and-burn technique used in deforestation, it is not a method used.
    Instead of "the United States' refusal..." you can rephrase it to "due to the refusal by the United States..."
    That's all and I'm looking forward to read your completed response! (:
    -Gio

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